note to self
by uzwi
Won’t do to have them separated for the whole thing. Structure would work better if they were given another chance at each other maybe two thirds through. She comes down to London. Semi-alienated encounter–heavily flagged up for the reader but a bit empty of apparent content–in which neither of them seems able to talk about their actual anxieties. (See 2nd meeting for tone.) He’s too preoccupied to pursue her over it. Tell this from his pov, then when you return to hers, have her write him an email in which she takes him to task about it while admitting that she’s also to blame & still not addressing her concerns. He doesn’t answer. When we switch back to his pov later, no mention is made of it. The ending solves this. Or not. (NB: placed right, the third encounter would also amplify the readers’ anxieties about what’s happening to her.)
the m john harrison blog 
The ending, when placed right?
This is why i come here to learn.
The really weird thing is, I [think I] have read this post about four, five or maybe six times. But each time I start it, I think it’s a new post that I haven’t read before. Or noticed. And then I get to about the half-way mark and it seems familiar and then I become [almost] certain that I have definitely read it before. But there’s always that teeny doubt that I haven’t. I’ve just done it again.